The third panel reads awkwardly.
Yeah, i thought of that, but I didn’t want to switch their positions
Could’ve had their positions switched all along, or is there a reason you didn’t?
Kudos for the joke though, I found it really funny
I’m not sure. I drew it a long time ago. Maybe it was one of the ones I didn’t want to edit or something.
Yeah, the eye flow is all messed up. The third panel, as it is, convinced my brain to switch to anime order to make sense, and then I read the fourth panel backwards and it made no sense.
I get the problem you had, but maybe the layout of something else could have been fixed? Because as-is I think the third panel sabotaged the whole comic…
Could use rectangle-y bubbles stucked vertically instead of circles?
Yeah, like this or something
Maybe put the left bubble higher than the right one?
It took me too long to notice he’s shirtless in the fourth panel and then I got stuck on how he got his tee off over that giant head. And then I wondered why his chest/shoulders are so much smaller naked. Although that part is kinda funny.
I agree with others, use vertical stacking on the speech bubbles in panels 3 and 4 and you’ll be okay for the conversation order.
The same but now his nips are pointy
She’s the same, but his hair looks different:-). Probably the jacket previously blocked much of its view.
